His Tempestuous Touch (18+ only )

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After a while, he goes down to applies a salve to the bruises he has inflicted on her. She turned around, with an innocent look at the corner of her eyes; he sees the tears in her eyes now, tears of happiness. As if she’s hungry for more, she doesn’t want him to stop. She wants more, she’s completely starving for the glory of his love.

Now he holds her hand softly, a true love of him which makes her weep in her arms, and it reminds of the bond they share between them as admirers, friends, and of course, soulmates.

He wailed to her..”Please, please darling, don’t make me repeat this for it tears at my heart to see you suffering.” He tried to make her understand.

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Her sweet and soft moans made him turn on again. And now, his Leather gauntlets started to adorn her butts with double intensity, and the groaning gave him a hard-on. As she feels the lukewarm love inside her. Now both of them leaned forward to each other and put kisses softly upon their lips.

“Now take rest, heal your wounds and be well, someday we would meet again” and he departs, leaving her in the fantasy world again…


So it was my first attempt at writing an erotic story(Other than my erotic poetry) I hope you like it. Please give your feedback, if I should continue with the same genre or not. πŸ™‚

Thank you! πŸ™‚

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67 thoughts on “His Tempestuous Touch (18+ only )”

      1. I do…
        but thought you were trying to show how bondage and sadistic loving can be real and work for some..

        But for a first time attempt
        And you write about this .. tells me this is what turns you on..

        It’s actually a good read..

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  1. WohoooooπŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ™ˆπŸ™ˆπŸ™ˆthis one is sooooo sooooo wildddπŸ˜πŸ™ˆit was fab ..
    From the beginning to the end ,u were in a beautiful flow❀
    And i just loved the way you write with so much deepnessπŸ™ˆ
    And yes you should continue with this genere❀
    Keep shining more more more❀❀😘😘😘😘

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  2. Awsome first attempt I must say. Next time go deep while defining their inert thoughts and emotions. I mean write more of that with fine details. Like what the touch of the gauntlet does to the woman, what she feels when it inflicts pain on her. What the guy feels to see her desire for more, the dilemma he faces. And the struggle for the want of Doing this and not doing this to her at the Same time. I hope u understand what I mean.
    These are things that would have made feel in her or his place.
    I know ur good at this so just keep bettering urself. πŸ˜ŠπŸ‘

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  3. Wowwww 😍😍it’s so beautiful and ofcourse you should continue it there is no any second thought sumit 😊☺😊

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  4. Wow Sumit… for your first erotica it is very intense of passion. You expressed the pleasure of submission and the excitement of being touched in that way very well.

    BDSM must be something you like? For you to be able to write it this good. I enjoyed reading I hope you wrote more. But only if you want to write more. After reading this i am going to have to call you Sexy Sumit, for writing something so erotic and secondly because based on your gravatar you are handsome. But most of this post was beautiful done very tasteful

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  5. Oops, I forgot my critique…..sorry, I’m still trembling.

    I thought you conveyed this experience so completely well. You touched on the dichotomy of bdsm…..the tenderness as well as the flagrant infliction of pain. You showed her strength in her submission. You showed his compassion. Most importantly you showed the total agreement between them. I believe a lot of first time writers miss this component in their earlier writing.

    It turned me on. ❀️

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    1. O. M. G.
      Are you kidding me right?
      I mean, how can you be so accurate about my thoughts while writing this piece? You are simply amazing.

      Yes, you are right. I did not focus much on describing their genitals or sexual activities much, but I emphasized much on what was going on their heads while having sex.

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      1. That is a very intelligent approach to this genre, I think. They say that our biggest erogenous zone is our mind and I honestly believe that most of our minds don’t want to go to the cheap, gratuitous, vulgarity. We all know what parts are used, lol, no need to describe it.

        Hinting, suggesting takes so much more talent. Plus, to convey their emotions, perfect. You got this, mister. Impressive. ❀️

        More please…..

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  6. Gonna give you some constructive criticism. This is just my personal opinion OK.
    In this stanza: She turned around, with an innocent look at the corner of her eyes; he sees the tears in her eyes now, tears of happiness. You used eyes twice, like repeating the
    sentence, and if you read it to yourself, you will see what I am saying, unless you
    don’t see it..and that’s OK too:). The story was a little tame..tamer than the pictures
    you posted. I think you could have been more descriptive and much much more
    rawer and detailed. Us as the readers want to see the scene/s unfold before us
    and to feel and see what’s going on. I think YOU could do this, need to just
    let go of the inhibition. As I said, this is only my opinion:)

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    1. First of all thanks so much for being a genuine critic of this work. Now I understand your points, I do believe that it was short and could have described in details.

      And I received this thing from almost everything, but at the same time it was my first attempt so I hardly knew how things work. But I promise to be more specific about description of all the activities in the next blog post. πŸ™‚

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  7. Wow! Such an original erotic poem. I have to say, I have not read one like this. I love how it flows smoothly and I can easily imagine the scenery so clearly. You did an excellent job with your word choice. Nicely written. I look forward to reading more! I loved it. Keep up the great work. 😊

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